Greater LA IRWMP Comments on Public Review Draft and Responses # Section Comment Response and/or Disposition General 1 Develop a system for tracking response to comments. There is some concern that comments are not being This table tracks the disposition of comments. reflected in this draft. Comments to LC – Indicate whether public comments are accepted or not accepted by them and why. 2 Plan meant to show “Big Story” of Region. Comment noted. 3 Tone is all passive voice. Should be more authoritative. As the plan is not a regulatory document and compliance is voluntary, the passive voice is considered appropriate. 4 Throughout, this document is written in the passive voice to its detriment. It is a plan for action and Specific responsibility for action is not always clear, as invidiual collaboration and many people have participated. There is no reason to hide the “actors” in this plan by using the agencies will need to undertake actions to make progress. passive voice. This example from the preface provides one illustration: “In addition, water resources must be Identifying specific entities may not always be accurate and lead planned in concert with the other issues that make up the urban context.” Who is going to do the planning? This some to conclude that they have no responsibility to engage in language avoids responsibility for planning. “We must plan for water resources….” at least gives some action to integration or specific ...
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